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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

 

May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?

 

(Oh, I almost forget to add this: Please?) ;D

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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

 

May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?.

 

(Oh, I almost forget to add this: Please?) ;D

 

MUCH better! Except you have included a period after your question mark, which is both redundant and confusing. Also, you spelled awesomeness incorrectly. ;)

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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

 

May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?.

 

(Oh, I almost forget to add this: Please?) ;D

 

MUCH better! Except you have included a period after your question mark, which is both redundant and confusing.

ROFL! Is that better?

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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

 

May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?.

 

(Oh, I almost forget to add this: Please?) ;D

 

MUCH better! Except you have included a period after your question mark, which is both redundant and confusing.

ROFL! It that better?

 

ROFL I will accede to being a modern form of slang in our technological era. However, "It that better?" should of course be phrased "Is that better" (don't confuse It and Is).

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Can I dance in your awesomeness Far Dareis Mai?

 

While this post is almost passable, there is some fine-tuning to be done. For starters, you seem to be asking permission, not asking whether you are able to dance, therefore you would want to start your sentence with 'May I' rather than 'Can I'. Second, a comma would be appropriately placed between 'awsomeness' and 'Far Dareis Mai', so the whole statement, from beginning to end would read: May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?. You could also consider adding a 'please' at the end, you know- for good manners! ;)

 

May I dance in your awsomeness, Far Dareis Mai?.

 

(Oh, I almost forget to add this: Please?) ;D

 

MUCH better! Except you have included a period after your question mark, which is both redundant and confusing.

ROFL! It that better?

 

ROFL I will accede to being a modern form of slang in our technological era. However, "It that better?" should of course be phrased "Is that better" (don't confuse It and Is).

Yet again my apologies!

 

Is that better?

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